Who's Driving?
by Rachel Hoyt
image by duron123 via freedigitalphotos.net
Who needs attention in order to drive?
Cars are made to protect what's inside -
With so many lights they could blind the night,
Blinkers for when direction's not implied,
Cushions and heat in the seat to assuage,
As gospel radio spouts, "You are saved!"
Every trip that it has made
is splattered all over its face.
It doesn't need a mechanic or nurse
or the blessing of the church
to avoid a smattering of worse,
but perhaps all the tricks in your purse -
You can sit and watch, but not from the back.
Every shell needs a driver and that's that.
Copyright © 2014 Rachel Hoyt. All rights reserved.
Thank you, dVerse Poets Pub for the Crambo prompt which produced this poem!
ha. it def needs a driver to get where it is going...though there are some i wish would pay more attention...i dont do well in the back seat either....ha
ReplyDeleteI was thinking a bit about self-driving cars when I wrote this, although it turned into a larger metaphor... and some people already 'drive' as though their car can drive itself. :P
DeleteGreat use of the words with good flow..oh those tricks in her purse..;)
ReplyDeleteThank you kkkkaty. I'm glad the 'tricks in her purse' made you smile. :)
Deletesmiles... love me a good road trip...there's a bit of magic in finding the right way... and yeah...some tricks can be useful..
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you enjoyed the imagery, Claudia. :) Thanks for visiting!
DeleteToo many drivers forget that although their metal box might keep them relatively safe, it's lethal to anyone who is outside when it hits them. and tehre are people who live life like this too ...
ReplyDeleteNice piece of crambo, Rachel ... smiles
Exactly! I drive a scooter and walk most of the time (although I do own a car). People take way too much comfort from that metal box. The ones who live their entire lives that way dumbfound me...
DeleteHumorous but with a solid little warning for those who listen... Nice use of the rhymes, with a neat twist!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Marina Sofia. That is the style I would love to be known for.
DeleteThe humoristic tone cannot hide the seriousness of the truths you tell.
ReplyDeleteThank you! I wouldn't want it to. :)
DeleteNice take on this fun game of bout rimes. Peace, Linda
ReplyDeleteI love Bouts Rimes! Thanks for visiting to see mine. :)
Deleteit is crazy what cars can do today all by themselves...but still, like any machine they are only as good as the person behind the wheel...and I prefer their undivided attention.
ReplyDeletenice piece!
I couldn't agree more. On a conceptual level it is pretty cool that they have invented a car that can drive itself. Practically speaking, I would rather we find a way to encourage drivers to pay attention and take responsibility for the vehicle carrying them down the road.
DeleteThanks for visiting!
Interesting outlook on the prompt - liked the use of rhymes and the theme which no one else seems to have chosen. A cool poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you Abhra. :-)
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