and think we need to help the birds before it's too late.
I now know of two that have flown right into a transformer...
If you were that blind you'd want someone to warn ya.
Perhaps some of the wealthier residents nearby,
would be interested in giving bird training a try.
Or if they aren't looking for a new pastime,
they could finance the foundation... that'd be fine!
You see, what we need is some seeing eye birds,
that could sit watch and, when needed, make their voices heard.
This caring act could prevent a future power outage,
or worse, another fire which could destroy the townage.
Also please, if you know a smart bird who's up for the task,
and would let him sit in the sun each day and bask...
Bring him or her to Goleta to lend a helping hand,
because seeing eye birds are in very high demand.
© Rachel Hoyt 2010 - 2011
First time on your blog all the way from Buenos Aires.......and I like it! I´d fun reading your blog, prometo regresar, que te parece??
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Me gustaria mucho si regresa,Vivien. :o)
ReplyDeleteI feel sorry for the poor birds
ReplyDeletesome training would be nice
Nicely conveyed poem
Thanks for sharing with One Shot
Moonie smiles
Good idea! I'd offer up my Mom's bird but she wouldn't approve. Right now, at the museum where I'm a docent, we have an exhibit of 50 Audubon prints taken from his watercolors.
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Love some of your end rhymes that add personality to the poem. Nice One Shot! Feel bad for the birds.
ReplyDeleteI got a chuckle out of your creativity, although I'm sure a true story exists beyond your words for a few sad birds.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the way you wrote this. My grandmother had such a heart for birds. I appreciate yours as well. Blessings!
ReplyDeleteVery amusing way of getting a serious point across. Nice one :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much to each of you for your kind comments! It's definitely a real message spun silly with my two cents. :o)
ReplyDeleteGreat title, pointed and fun work.
ReplyDeleteFull of fun and interesting read
ReplyDeleteWhat a great, semi-silly approach to a real issue. Good one!
ReplyDeletewhat a light and humorous way to bring about a serious problem you all may be having. I enjoy your rhyming style...
ReplyDeleteDear Rachael
ReplyDeletewhat a nice one.. yes we do need a 'seeing' bird too.. I liked it. thanks for sharing..
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I like your approach on the subject.Making it a poem added impact and made one truly feel the need for * seeing eye birds*Hopefully lots will fly your way.
ReplyDeleteFun yet deep one shot!Thanks for sharing!