Thursday, August 9, 2012

Thursday Thoughts - Amtrak's Business Cents



Dear Amtrak and those with railroad riding style,

Those $9 burgers really cost you sixteen?
And you don't make it up off the drinks at the bar?
Perhaps you should try serving better cuisine.

Those $9 burgers really cost you sixteen?
I've eaten much better off the local food truck.
Perhaps you should try serving better cuisine,
Or subcontract to save a buck?

I've eaten much better off the local food truck.
Are you allowed to cook on the train?
Subcontracting might help you save a buck.
I might buy some if the food was less plain.

Are you allowed to cook on the train?
I fear a future where no food's served at all.
I might buy some if the food was less plain.
I bought those drinks to stall your downfall.

I fear a future where no food's served at all.
It can't be good for the passengers' moods.
I bought those drinks to stall your downfall.
Perhaps you just need more passengers, dudes.

It can't be good for the passengers' moods.
We need munchies to pretend we're sane.
Perhaps you just need more passengers, dudes.
Improvement ideas must exist in your brain.

We need munchies to pretend we're sane.
Make your money off drinks at the bar!
Improvement ideas must exist in your brain.

May your ideas flow and cash form a big pile!

Sincerely,

Rachel Hoyt
of Rhyme Me a Smile

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3 comments:

  1. i think that it would be better if you avoided the repetition of verses.Lovers' Shore

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    1. I am sorry you did not enjoy the form. The body of the letter is a pantoum poem.

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  2. That was lame Made me hungry find something better to do wit your time

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