Monday, December 5, 2011

Rubber-Band Regret



These rhymes were written for Mad-Kane's Limerick Off.
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VERSION #1:

A guy who was frequently prone
to gain cash that others had blown
rubber-bands, with a yawn.
"I'd invested if only I'd known."

© 2011 - All rights reserved - Rachel Hoyt

VERSION #2:
 
 
A guy who was frequently prone
to gain cash that others had blown
rubber-bands, with a yawn.
"Esto me hace un papelón?"

© 2011 - All rights reserved - Rachel Hoyt

(Non-Rhyming Side Note: I changed the final line because I have always wanted to rhyme in Spanish and this seemed a great time to try it.  The translation is, roughly, "This makes me foolish?" or "This makes a fool out of me?")

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16 comments:

  1. The second one I don't know
    The language doesn't flow
    English is all I san speak
    I know I'm weak..haha

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  2. This is awesome how you rhyme.

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  3. Both are cute and clever, but I vote for the first one!
    Thanks for putting a smile on my face today, Rachel.
    Blessings!

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  4. Interesting word flow!

    Erick Flores

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  5. ha wish i could speak to understand the second....investing in rubber bands actually might not be a bad investment these days...

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  6. He sure had so much cash blow away...nice rhyming poem ~

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  7. I like the rhyming :) ...and of course, I understood the first one much better!

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  8. clever and creative :) nice rhyming!

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  9. @Pat - I understand your issue with the flow, but then again it was about Pablo... who would've spoken Spanish, you know?

    @Debbie - Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed them.


    @Martha - Thanks! I'm glad to have given you a smile. :)

    @eflores - Thank you! It was an experiment for me. :)

    @Morning - I'm glad you enjoyed the word flow. Thanks for visiting!

    @Brian - You still think rubber bands are a solid investment, eh? LOL

    @Heaven - He would have had much cash blow away if not for those rubber bands! LOL

    @Caty - I'm glad you enjoyed the rhymes. I think most like the first one best (as anticipated). :)

    @ayala - Thanks for visiting! Your comments are always appreciated. :)

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  10. I think i get the bit of wittiness in this. Be Well.

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  11. I didn't understand the joke until I clicked on the link. Wow. That is a lot of rubber bands. I wonder how much each band holds?

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  12. @voiceoftruelove - thanks! I think the joke is being missed without the news article to explain...

    @Mari - Thank you! :)

    @CheesyDoug - I think he must have been wrapping small stacks. :)

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  13. This is great; so much more than your typical limerick. This is a meta-limerick! Love the language play, and how you supply extra information with those links. A+ for the extra effort!

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  14. LOL! What fun! Thanks for joining in with your fun limerick. I love the ones based on news stories. :) And what a wild story it is!

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Rhyming or not, I would like a lot to hear the thoughts my words brought...